There are twenty four hours in a day, and every day I spend about ten of them sleeping. Sleeping is something everyone, everywhere does everyday, but then there is the time when you are not at home for a few days. You finally return to the comfort of your sheets and get to nestle in your own, warm blankets for the first time in what seems like too long. There is no object more comforting than one big enough to crawl into and no better place to dream than a tunnel of soft sheets. A cold day by the buses and all anyone wants is to be at home, tucked up in bed with a hot chocolate, and who could blame them? My bed is not individual or unique in the way it looks, in fact I’m sure it was made on a mass-produced scale and there are thousands of others like it. Despite this, somehow, each bed still manages to be individual to a person in the way it feels, and although you may be sleeping in a bed with the same material, the same company’s bed stand etcetera, only one bed is yours, and its only one bed that consoles me. One day I will move out of the house I am living in and onto other places in my life. My bed is not a possession I know I can take with me, and when the time comes I’m sure their will be other beds I grow to love, and other mattresses who comfort me at night. For the mean time however, there is no place I can be that makes me feel as soothed and secure as being between the wrinkled sheets of my bed.
4 comments:
Hi Katie,
I really enjoyed reading this blog as you seemed to put across your love for your bed well- for example where you said, "no better place to dream than a tunnel of soft sheets." I particularly liked this quote because you described every aspect of your bed in detail without it getting boring or repetitive.
However, I do think this post could be improved easily by displaying your work in paragraphs and with a variety of sentence structure. This would create a more sophisticated/professional appearance for your post.
Nice one! Louise
I like how you have written about your bed in more than one way, and the fact that you have elaborated your meaning with metaphor's. Particularly i liked 'A tunnel of soft sheets'. One thing that you could maybe look at or explore is using different punctuation to portray different meaning. On the whole though it was an interesting piece to read.
thank you for your comments :) i see what you mean about varying punctuation, i didn't think too much about that in this piece so i will work to use it to my advantage more in the future.
I completely agree with Louise. The line "no better place to dream than a tunnel of soft sheets." is fantastically evocative.
I also have to agree with them about the paragraphing and punctuation. Your vocabulary is excellent but your writing could be far stronger, being shaped through the use of punctuation.
Mr. M.
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